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Re: Beckon me to come.
Posted: Tue May 04, 2010 3:22 am
by Cate
not keen on "manly sword"
ouch but I like your poem.
It's fun with a nice rhythm to it
<grin> as well a clever ending.
Re: Beckon me to come.
Posted: Tue May 04, 2010 11:54 pm
by Harry S
Cate and me always agree, that "manly sword" has to go.
Geoffrey
Re: Beckon me to come.
Posted: Wed May 05, 2010 12:06 am
by imaginary friend
You might regret asking for suggestions. I'm sorry, but I can't keep a straight face when asked for that kind of suggestion (I can hardly keep a straight face at the best of times...)
Re: Beckon me to come.
Posted: Wed May 05, 2010 12:10 am
by Cate
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Re: Beckon me to come.
Posted: Wed May 05, 2010 12:16 am
by imaginary friend
What about 'lift me like...' rather than '...on'?
As in 'Lift me like an olive branch' (but not that of course).
Re: Beckon me to come.
Posted: Wed May 05, 2010 3:04 am
by Alsiony
What about - lift me like... a Ripe Gourd?? Haha
A
x
Re: Beckon me to come.
Posted: Wed May 05, 2010 3:16 am
by Alsiony
I will not say any more about my suggestion because I might make myself blush
A
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Re: Beckon me to come.
Posted: Wed May 05, 2010 4:08 am
by Cate
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Re: Beckon me to come.
Posted: Wed May 05, 2010 4:47 am
by Cate
oh my goodness - I think I'm tired again
Re: Beckon me to come.
Posted: Thu May 06, 2010 2:05 am
by kwills
Place me on your ripe cucumber
And beckon me to come
Give me something to remember
And beckon me to come
Re: Beckon me to come.
Posted: Thu May 06, 2010 2:18 am
by kwills
Place me on your chilly willy
And beckon me to come
Firm and hot and very nibbly
You beckon me to come.
Re: Beckon me to come.
Posted: Thu May 06, 2010 2:21 am
by kwills
Cate wrote:manly swords - giant gourds
what about
Enter me firmly, slowly
And beckon me to come.
Make me speak words unholy
And beckon me to come
Actually,being serious now
keep with Cate's idea but change the last line from
And beckon me to come to
You beckon me to come.
Re: Beckon me to come.
Posted: Thu May 06, 2010 2:30 am
by kwills
The reference to chilly willy was this
viewtopic.php?f=11&t=21532#p224993
Re: Beckon me to come.
Posted: Thu May 06, 2010 2:48 am
by kwills
Hi karrenb
I have posted a serious reply but you must have missed it in between posting.
Enter me firmly, slowly
And beckon me to come.
Make me speak words unholy
And beckon me to come
That's from cate I just thought that changing 'And' to 'You' in the last line would be better.
Re: Beckon me to come.
Posted: Thu May 06, 2010 3:01 am
by Violet
.. this conversation is making me feel a bit.. sore..