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Let us work out mysteries
and magical intensities
and the fabric of the wind from the breeze
and the golden sunflowers sparkling of the mystic sea
and the handcuffs and the actual desire to be free
the knotted rope and the executioner to be
and if you do not sit up and believe
we will look at the graves and the weeds
the flowers and the seeds
the gameplan and the deeds
the dead matador and that which gone before
the silent seashells on a silent sea shore
the party pooper and the absolute bloody bore
and the magical shadows on a darkened tent
the messages you were hoping to send, but have not sent
the days after Christmas and the advent
and the horse did stamp it's feet at the moon
and the second coming has been promised soon
and the mystics will keep on casting the runes
and the looneys will keep on playing a looney tune
and the witches will take the dust off their old broom
and the nikon cameras will zoom and zoom
and the winged horse did fly
to that safe haven in the known signed sky
and the believers clambered to believe
and the puppet was laughing into it's very loose sleeve
that's a very simple way to decieve
and the pious were anxious to leave the slease
and the naked mistress was always anxious to tease
those were the forgotten days at the end
that's in no way the sentiments to have to defend
Georges

Copyright: George Wright 2004

George- This is my favorite of what I had read of your writing. A constant build from start to finish. Every line a brick in it's own right, but with careful attention to the build. Great, great...

The rhyming was far too predictable. It was like a rhyming shopping list which is ok but would annoy the hell out of the check-out girl, don't you think?

Thanks Epurcelly and Harry for your comments. It was like building a pyramid, Epurcelly.
Georges

Harry Harpin wrote:The rhyming was far too predictable.

I disagree Harry... Plentiful but not predictable.