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A Little Piece of Poetry
Posted: Sat Apr 03, 2004 8:11 pm
by yoav
Every time I fall in love
I tranclate it into poetry.
After a while I realize
That it wasn't really love
And even more sadly -
That it wasn't really poetry.
This is just another proof
That I'm bad at writing songs
But good at telling the truth.
Posted: Sat Apr 03, 2004 10:00 pm
by margaret
Don't give up on either.
Posted: Sun Apr 04, 2004 7:57 am
by lizzytysh
That's precious, Yoav.....and "good at telling the truth" can never be underestimated. Welcome to the Forum
.
~ Lizzytysh
Posted: Sun Apr 04, 2004 11:34 am
by Arno
very nice yoav,
welcome
although I may add that translate is spelled with an s as far as I know
no offence, just a petite correction
take care
Arno
Posted: Sun Apr 04, 2004 12:05 pm
by Epurcelly
Hey Yoav-
I dug your poem. To me, there is no possible way that honest writing can be anything but beautiful poetry. Thank you and welcome to the swimming pool.
Arno- I don't know about the trends in Germany, but in N.J., it is all the rage to put a "c" in place of an "s" All the cool kids are smokin' cigs and switchin' the "s"
Posted: Sun Apr 04, 2004 12:32 pm
by Pete
I like the style of the poem... the realisation at the end.
Replacing s's with c's ?? How dare the kids in NJ tamper this way with the English language!! Language must evolve in a way that does not resort to just switching letters. Suppose we decided to switch b's with d's... where woulb the bestiny of our language leab us? I shubber to think.
I've said my bit. I could write more but I have to snuke this afternoon and must prepare myself accordingly.
Yours in good faith,
Pete
Posted: Sun Apr 04, 2004 1:13 pm
by Harry Harpin
I think if you were to check out my poem for Father's Day you would get more of an idea of advanced poetry and it might give you soemthing to aim for! Anyway, good try for a beginner. By the way, watch out for the really thick people here and also the rude ones who are agressive for no reasoning at all!
Posted: Sun Apr 04, 2004 2:15 pm
by yoav
Thanks for the warm welcome, and the spelling corrections.
Posted: Sun Apr 04, 2004 2:41 pm
by lizzytysh
Pete ~
Did you
know I'd be sitting, melting into my computer with laughter
, before I even
got to snuke
? Great jod!
Love,
Lizzy
Posted: Sun Apr 04, 2004 2:44 pm
by lizzytysh
Epurcelly ~
". . .and welcome to the swimming pool.
" ~ I like that
. And, despite what 'some' may say, the water's warm
.
~ Lizzy
Posted: Sun Apr 04, 2004 5:56 pm
by Pete
Elizabeth
I just knew
I couldn't resist. I have returned from my snuking. The weather was kind but the moors were bleak.
Pete