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Graphite

the thin gray line smears
as i touch it
dragging my finger along
the curves
smudging them
into faint fat facts
nothing like their original

shapes

oppressed by the medium
fingerprinted
questioned
released

i begin again
a darker softer shade
applying more pressure
in aggressive strident
strokes
walking down the page
the journey taking shape
slowly
smudging again
as the blade of my hand
slices across it
leaving a distinct
urge
as if in anger
or despair

lost in the angle
of hand holding tightly
the slender sharpened tool

defining
fine intricate precise

words

holding to truths
nothing but truths
whole truths

smudged

into life

31 December 2009

Hello Vern,

There's is so much that I like here. Your words have indeed drawn an excellent picture for us, it's very tactile.

shapes

oppressed by the medium
fingerprinted
questioned
released


love it! very clever, I also like how you repeat that form later under with 'words'.


all the best,

cate

Happy birthday, Vern!

Mary

Thanks, Molly. I was coming here for the same thing, to wish Vern a Happy Birthday... our New Year's Baby! Very good of you to leave us such a lovely gift as your poem, Vern... a Hobbit Birthday . What else did you do or are you doing to celebrate?


Love,
Lizzy

I did not do too much on my birthday - I had to work. One of the women I work with surprised me with a birthday cake, and a nice, comfortable, friendly hug which did wonders for my soul.

Thanks for the wishes and the comments on my poems.

Vern

Hi Vern,

I really enjoyed Graphite.

Your word groups - just a few per line - forced me to scroll down, as if following a crayoned line as it moves across a sheet of paper. Initially, I thought it was about creating a drawing, until the 'slender sharpened tool' line, and I realized then, that it was about writing, about that kind of artwork. The drawing reference fitted really well, for me.