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Page after page after page
lurches forth from my pen
Draft after draft after draft
sometimes they start at the end

The doctor's orders (my prescription):
"Write 'til your fingertips bleed
Ride the lines galloping onto the page
'til your infinite being is freed

Set down the scientific papers
Push all the theories aside
Surf the waves of your memories,
Let the words tumble out on the tide"

I particularly like the potential of this line, "Juan";

Ride the lines galloping onto the page

I would change this a little though,(something like below) to bring out the poetry pregnant in that unique image you have created, but not yet refined.


Ride the galloping lines...

It brings the reader into and onto the page.

Regards,
MatbbgJ

I really like your poem, Juan, including your suggestion, Mat. Far more succinct... no losses, only gains. Super script.