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Let's look at the good and the bad
the difference in the happy and the sad
the sun and the moon to be had
the silly little fashion fads
the union bewteen man and wife
the silly conflicts and the strifes
the yin and yang in your life
the love and the hurt and the pain
the direction of the birds in flight
the infamous and the fame
the guttering and the drain
the answer is always the same
don't try and seperate the game from the blame
the only way is to go insane!!!!!
Georges

George, It sounds quite sane to me. Songkathy

kathy, about as sane as the nature of life
Georges

George, just one tiny thing i have noticed about your writing. There is this tendency to use 'the' or 'and' repeatedly at the start of lines. I don't know about anyone else, but it often grates, and causes a lack of direction and structure to some of your work. But i may be wrong.

p.

Hi Partisan and George,
See We Are All Good Poets for my opinion. One of my favorite things about sharing my poetry is that people have such varied reactions to it. In one class I was in the teacher really hated a line in one of my poems and strongly suggested I take it out. Oddly, several people in the class said it was their favorite line and thought it was the crux of the poem. so I learned to go my own way and trust my own instincts. Kathy

These words were used to bind the thoughts together, which were all over the place, poetry is a good way to communicate thoughts and feelings.
Georges

That much i understand Georges, however it seems as if you are just rewriting the same poem over and over. It is ok for poems to have punctuation last i checked. The use of those two words is not giving the structure you seek ,but just making it seem like a lot of disjointed thoughts.

p.

Ok, we must differ on this point. I see where you are coming from. I don't write my poems for anyone else, they come from me.
Best Regards...........Georges

Indeed so Georges. As a small side point, i always find my self hearing what you write in 'ulster', lol. This will no doubt be lost on some of our foreign readers. However it does give an interesting slant on things. I only mention this to ask if indeed you have a broad ulster accent or not.

p.

I have a broad Ulster accent but i am trying to get out of the mentality.
The poems are helping me, so i persist.
leeche was a reference to a still good friend and me, we were leeches at a card school...........we visited a chinese resturant and it became Lychee's
Georges is not any attempt to be feminate, i detest any shirtlifting.
I hope this clears up the questions for you............I enjoy the board for the craick and do not wish to be at loggerhead's with anyone.
Best Regards.................Georges

See? That wasn't so difficult. Good reasons for anything. I was thinking you were not so enamoured of homosexuals since your "And the gays did prance line".

p.