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Love is
the force that is cupped or coupled
energy going back on itself in caress
double circle or infinity, to forever last
the hourglass of no surpass
the freshness of the newly mown grass
the sweetness of the fresh virgin lass
and the force that will transpond
the cancer cure from the pond
the enemy from those you are fond
the brunette from the blonde
the closest from the distant yond
and it is the fusion of life
and the common force of strife
to expel and to die
the complex genetic messages in you and i
faking orgasms before the blood red sky
tantric complexities and wondering the reasons why
energy that cannot be created or destroyed
life that will emerge from the void
and the fusion of the ying and the yang
the hunger that existed before the pang
the positive and the negative
the desire to forever live and to let live
and the angels crossed their flaming swords
to keep out the wonderings of the hungry hoards
just one drop from the salaviating lips of the lord
would overthrow the genetic time bound frozen fjord
of the cycle of birth and death
love will be forever blest
Georges

Ah Georges~ Your philosophy incarnate. The first line is my favorite. So much revealed in 7 words. Passion vs. Love Itself, as i see it. The circle of life wrapped up in positive and negative images works well.

I think if some of the rhyming pairs of lines were closer in syllabic beats, parts of this would read smoother.

For example:

"The positive and the negative" is 9 syllables

the next rhyming line is:

"The desire to forever live and to let live" is 13 syllables

It is amazing how much of a difference a "beat" or two can make.

Nice piece. And great message. Thanks for sharing. Laurie

Thank you Laurie for your kind message and inputs. I am glad you liked my little offering, i will rework on your ideas.......
Georges