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This Man's a Freud

Posted: Sun Jan 04, 2004 4:45 pm
by Strictly Confidential
I put Sigmund Freud in a toothbrush mug
arms high, waving his knowledge and his confidence,
after all, only fools or niche psychoanalysts
dare to wear bow-ties.

In his right hand, probably a cigar
maybe a burnt pencil,
either way, ready to tap the ashes
of the burning relationship I bring him.

In that same bathroom accessory,
late at night,
husband sleeping,
wife returns,
anxious creeping
she gargles clean her consensual infidelity.

Now, here’s a strange one-
a month ago
she knew a ton of feathers weighed
as much as a ton of lead,
but that the burden of sharing
matched the burden of secrecy
was not within her head.

Her man-
now here’s a strange one
strong enough to be weak
a week enough to make him wonder
if his boast that monogamy was unnatural,
unlike beech or oak,
was really just a middle-class theory.

Anyway, she comes there
then she comes back,
then she comes again,
and he hasn’t a clue
if he is any happier now
than he ever was.

And that will be £100,
Sigmund says,
from one mug to another.

Posted: Sun Jan 04, 2004 10:55 pm
by lizzytysh
I love this one, SC. Very cleverly done with some truisms.

"she knew a ton of feathers weighed
as much as a ton of lead,
but that the burden of sharing
matched the burden of secrecy
was not within her head."

Excellent!

Posted: Mon Jan 05, 2004 1:32 am
by Byron
SC, you have hit upon the gilt of guilt. I enjoy re-reading this piece of yours. You do have a way with words and it is fun for you, yes?

Posted: Mon Jan 05, 2004 4:16 pm
by Ben Kelly
SC

Glad to see you back writing, which should be the only agenda.

Great and enjoy your success

Kind regards

Ben

Posted: Mon Jan 05, 2004 10:57 pm
by Strictly Confidential
thank you Ben. I just made two edits each of which made me happy! in a week's time I will give it a serious review and see how I can improve it.

Posted: Tue Jan 06, 2004 8:53 pm
by Strictly Confidential
hi, I know this poem has not attracted a great deal of attention but I would love to add a photo of my Freud figure in his toothbrush mug. I cant get image option to work so far. help, please?

Posted: Wed Jan 07, 2004 7:14 pm
by Ben Kelly
Dear SC

Refer to Jarkko, he will help

Ben