Iambic thingie
Posted: Thu Aug 27, 2009 8:53 pm
My latest Shakespearean-style iambic pentameter in blank verse....
the end.
Thank you.
the end.
Thank you.
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Re: Iambic thingie
Posted: Thu Aug 27, 2009 9:21 pm
.. Byron, you leave me speechless..
Re: Iambic thingie
Posted: Thu Aug 27, 2009 9:23 pm
Excellent verse Byron!
You have managed to be both translucent and succinct.
You have managed to be both translucent and succinct.
Re: Iambic thingie
Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 12:18 am
Thank you both. I was always taught to allow the reader the room to bring their own imagery to one's prose and poetic form.
I have endeavoured to give the reader the widest expanse possible wherein he/she can illuminate the essences of the piece I've presented to her/him.
Having watched the Turner Prize winners over so many years, I feel that at the very least I can hold my own in their esteemed company, if only as an 'umble jobbing wordsmith. ( rubbing hands together in a slimy and ingratiating sort of way )
I have endeavoured to give the reader the widest expanse possible wherein he/she can illuminate the essences of the piece I've presented to her/him.
Having watched the Turner Prize winners over so many years, I feel that at the very least I can hold my own in their esteemed company, if only as an 'umble jobbing wordsmith. ( rubbing hands together in a slimy and ingratiating sort of way )
Re: Iambic thingie
Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 2:17 pm
Byron!
This was mean - I was all ready for an example of a metered poem
YOU ARE VERY NAUGHTY - off to the corner with you
go on
This was mean - I was all ready for an example of a metered poem
YOU ARE VERY NAUGHTY - off to the corner with you
go on
Re: Iambic thingie
Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 5:17 pm
"Ooooh, whip me whip me, but don't hurt me." 
A very old clip from 'Round The Horn,' by Jules and Sandie.
A very old clip from 'Round The Horn,' by Jules and Sandie.
Re: Iambic thingie
Posted: Sat Aug 29, 2009 8:52 am
whirrrrrr-SNAP! whirrrrr-snap!
Time to move on? I may trade my mask and whip for a wimple and habit...
XO
Time to move on? I may trade my mask and whip for a wimple and habit...
XO
Re: Iambic thingie
Posted: Sat Aug 29, 2009 1:40 pm
whirrrrrr-SNAP! whirrrrr-snap!
ouch ouch ouch ouch ouch ouch yelp
whirrrrrr-SNAP! whirrrrr-snap!
Ladies and gentlemen I give you a joint presentation of our latest haiku.
ouch ouch ouch ouch ouch ouch yelp
whirrrrrr-SNAP! whirrrrr-snap!
Ladies and gentlemen I give you a joint presentation of our latest haiku.
Re: Iambic thingie
Posted: Mon Aug 31, 2009 5:41 am
My favourite lines are the two in the very middle, Byron. Well done .
.Re: Iambic thingie
Posted: Mon Aug 31, 2009 6:02 pm
Thank you Elizabeth. I struggled long, longer and hard, to discover the form of 'beat' and multilayered transcendence of those particular lines.
I am delighted that you have grasped that nettle, which is tremendously difficult, given the previous ascendence (spl ?) and the following lowering of tonal delivery of the two enveloping lines. Well spotted.
I am delighted that you have grasped that nettle, which is tremendously difficult, given the previous ascendence (spl ?) and the following lowering of tonal delivery of the two enveloping lines. Well spotted.
Re: Iambic thingie
Posted: Mon Aug 31, 2009 8:51 pm
Byron mon, where I come from, that kind of talk is called 'speakey-spokey'Byron wrote:
I am delighted that you have grasped that nettle, which is tremendously difficult, given the previous ascendence (spl ?) and the following lowering of tonal delivery of the two enveloping lines. Well spotted.
Re: Iambic thingie
Posted: Tue Sep 01, 2009 12:56 am
For speakey-spokey, I would say I'm intoxicated by the exuberance of my own verbosity. 
Re: Iambic thingie
Posted: Mon Sep 14, 2009 6:15 am
Dunno - seems a little to verbose for me 