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Dolphin Dancing
Posted: Tue Oct 07, 2003 2:25 pm
by Makera
~Dolphin Dancing~
Blithe fluidity
~~~~~Lithe lucidity
Silver arcs shimmer
from flash
~~~~~~to splash
and glimmer
In a glimpse
~~~~~~~~~to grasp
The heart-leap
of Freedom's touch
In the spirit
~~~~~~of emotion
In the ocean
~~~~~~of their Joy
To turn, turn as
A little child
To See
~~~~~~~so free
To Be
And laugh as One
~~~~~to Dance among
The angels of
~~~~~~~~~the Sea
(1996)
[for Tatiana]
~Makera
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Posted: Tue Oct 07, 2003 2:38 pm
by George.Wright
a flowing sine wave of the dolphin's dance
towards the other side
and watch the rhythm of life, ebb and tide
and cross the towers of babels of the great computer divide
and allow the angels or mermaids on the back of the dolphin, do ride
language reorganised, the language of universal love
cross the cyberspace in the clasp of the white Holy Dove
Nice poem, Makera..........Georges
Posted: Tue Oct 07, 2003 3:02 pm
by Makera
Thank you, George~
Did you just do that little piece on the spot?
(A little tidying up would make it perfect) not trying to be 'nit-picky', it's just an 'affliction' - you know.
~Makera
Posted: Tue Oct 07, 2003 3:24 pm
by George.Wright
Makera, i always compose "on the spot", that's why i have so many spelling mistakes..............
Georges
Posted: Tue Oct 07, 2003 3:28 pm
by George.Wright
makera, i have tidyied the poem
Georges
Posted: Tue Oct 07, 2003 3:35 pm
by Makera
Oh yes, thats much better.
~Makera
Posted: Sun Nov 09, 2003 8:08 pm
by Susanne
Makera, that's ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL!!!
Your poem gives such a sensitive characterization of the dolphins - so vivid, visual and evocative!
The alliterations, the onomatopoeic words and the graphic composition of your poem - the small waves and the 'dancing' of the words - add so beautifully to it and paint a wonderfully vivid picture of the dancing dolphins!
Love, Susanne

Posted: Sun Nov 09, 2003 9:03 pm
by Makera
Ah, shucks, Susanne!

....Now I'm really blushing!
What lovely, literary compliments!
(Ooh, I love that word, 'onomatopoeia')
Thank you, you are a sweetheart.
with a Heart-leaping Splash,
~Makera
Posted: Sun Nov 09, 2003 9:19 pm
by lizzytysh
Well, not much more to be said after Susanne's accurate response ~ and I loved your "Heart-leaping Splash," Makera

! Great image

!
Wonderful poem

, title included!
~ Lizzy
Posted: Mon Nov 10, 2003 12:50 am
by Makera
Oh, man! double whammy!!
Thank you Lizzy, that was really sweet of you!
~Double Pirouette~
~~!~!!Splash!!~!~~
~~%~Makera~%~~~
Posted: Mon Nov 10, 2003 12:53 am
by lizzytysh
Hi Makera

~
I'm laughing out loud at your latest sign-off

. And, you're welcome, of course

!
~ Lizzy
Posted: Sat Nov 15, 2003 8:09 pm
by Susanne
Makera wrote: ~Double Pirouette~
~~!~!!Splash!!~!~~
~~%~Makera~%~~~
~!*cute*!~
Love, Susanne

Posted: Wed Nov 19, 2003 12:20 pm
by Makera
Thanks Susanne,
I decided to give the whole thing a colour face-lift.
Also, I wanted to tell George how much I appreciated his wonderful, spontaneous poetic responses to my poetry. Because we had often communicated (re poetry) via PMs, I may have appeared 'ungracious' to some casual observers.
Love,
Makera
Posted: Tue May 25, 2004 9:01 pm
by Makera
Well, this won Gold in an AP poetry contest: (best of all, the contest holder's 10 year old daughter was the main judge

)
http://allpoetry.com/Poem/430185
btw, the leaping dolphin graphic was added
after winning.
Posted: Wed May 26, 2004 4:09 am
by lizzytysh
What leaping-dolphin graphic, Makera? Congratulations on winning

~ I always loved this one, and the 10-year-old girl was a great judge

!
~ Lizzy