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Countrymen

Posted: Wed Feb 06, 2008 3:52 am
by William
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Re: Countrymen

Posted: Wed Feb 06, 2008 2:36 pm
by Sue
I know what you mean, but these are the same people who will run you over with no qualms if you happen to be walking down a country lane.

Re: Countrymen

Posted: Wed Feb 06, 2008 5:39 pm
by Alan Alda
Hi William~

Nice sentiments. I think you did a good job giving your readers that sense of 'him' being out of place and then validating him.

I think in some places the wording seems padded to conform to your syllable count.
Also, I wonder if "Countrymen" might work better as two words?

Thanks for the read,
Laurie