Bathtime fun
Posted: Tue Jan 15, 2008 3:03 am
revision 2 - may 12
Body penetrates
water crashes
Rollll ... onto belly
sliide . across bottom
rest body
warmth penetrates
revision 1 - may 12
Body penetrates surface
Water crashes angrily to sides
Roll onto belly
Slide across porcelain bottom
Body comes to rest
Feet lay crossed on tile
Fingers brush porcelains top
Hair and soft parts float
Warmth penetrates skin and muscle
Original, original - meant as spoken word
Water ........ smooth ........ calm .........still
Toe ...... foot ...... body ........ penetrates
Waves ... ripple .. roll .mount crash
body ......... porcelain ......... smooth ........ s
tap........toe........water.......spout..................l
legs.........tile.........fingers......link ..................i
cascade.........thighs.........shutter......................d
un dul a tions......................................................e
.... calm
Flip .-... belly .. porcelain .. smooth .. ...................................................
Hair .. face .. bottom .. legs ...... float..........
Mouth .... nose .... bubbles .......
....... still ...... water ...... br eaks
warmth .... penetrates .. skin ...... muscles......re
body ...... smooth ...... calm ...... still .................la
..............................................................................x
Original posted
[
Water
Water ........ smooth ........ calm .........still
Toe ..... foot ..... body ....... penetrates
Waves .. ripple . roll .mount crash
Flip ..-.... belly .... porcelain .... smooth .. sl
Un dul a tions . ............................................i
.... calm .........................................................d
Hair ... face .... bottom .... legs ....... float..........e
Mouth .... nose .... bubbles .......
....... still ...... water ...... br eaks
warmth ...... penetrates ...... skin ....... muscles......re
body ...... smooth ...... calm ........ still ......................la
.....................................................................................x
Edited so many times due to pressing submit instead of preview while playing with bubbles and spaces. Also due to boredom which had me playing with bubbles and spaces instead of doing something productive.
Body penetrates
water crashes
Rollll ... onto belly
sliide . across bottom
rest body
warmth penetrates
revision 1 - may 12
Body penetrates surface
Water crashes angrily to sides
Roll onto belly
Slide across porcelain bottom
Body comes to rest
Feet lay crossed on tile
Fingers brush porcelains top
Hair and soft parts float
Warmth penetrates skin and muscle
Original, original - meant as spoken word
Water ........ smooth ........ calm .........still
Toe ...... foot ...... body ........ penetrates
Waves ... ripple .. roll .mount crash
body ......... porcelain ......... smooth ........ s
tap........toe........water.......spout..................l
legs.........tile.........fingers......link ..................i
cascade.........thighs.........shutter......................d
un dul a tions......................................................e
.... calm
Flip .-... belly .. porcelain .. smooth .. ...................................................
Hair .. face .. bottom .. legs ...... float..........
Mouth .... nose .... bubbles .......
....... still ...... water ...... br eaks
warmth .... penetrates .. skin ...... muscles......re
body ...... smooth ...... calm ...... still .................la
..............................................................................x
Original posted
[
Water
Water ........ smooth ........ calm .........still
Toe ..... foot ..... body ....... penetrates
Waves .. ripple . roll .mount crash
Flip ..-.... belly .... porcelain .... smooth .. sl
Un dul a tions . ............................................i
.... calm .........................................................d
Hair ... face .... bottom .... legs ....... float..........e
Mouth .... nose .... bubbles .......
....... still ...... water ...... br eaks
warmth ...... penetrates ...... skin ....... muscles......re
body ...... smooth ...... calm ........ still ......................la
.....................................................................................x
Edited so many times due to pressing submit instead of preview while playing with bubbles and spaces. Also due to boredom which had me playing with bubbles and spaces instead of doing something productive.