Haiku Corner.

[lizzytysh]

Greta !

Your haikus are stunning!!! I love these. They have to do with nature, the seasons, and the element of surprize. Simply [to use your and the correct word ] beautiful. Very peaceful reading.......and as Haikus always seem to be for me. Yours have a particularly peaceful and serene essence.

Love,
Elizabeth

[greta]

thank you Lizzy I'm glad that at least some one likes them. I am quite worried that i might not write them correctly. I'm not sure how to count syllables. for example are [r] is one syllable i think but if it was a word in estonian it would be two syllables a-re . Kind of confusing... I hope i'll get the hang of it in time
So far if i'll ever post any more haikus...ignore the mistakes

[lizzytysh]

Hi Greta ~

And actually, I didn't think to count the syllables ~ they just "felt" right. I'll go back to see what you're referring to and see if I can relevantly comment. Please do keep continuing to post them!

~ Elizabeth

[Makera]

Greta~

Your Haiku are perfectly lovely! I wouldn't be concerned about 'counting syllables'. I don't believe the 'rules' are meant to be strict; they are only a guide....to brevity.

Love,

Makera

[lizzytysh]

Yes, Greta, the way the word "are" is pronounced here is definitely one syllable, so in your Haiku-count of syllables, would count as one. If there are any words that you wonder about, I'll be really happy to break them down into the number of syllables for you. Just PM me . No matter what, please keep posting your Haiku poetry. It's beautiful .

~ Lizzytysh

[witty_owl]

Greta, I really like the last one;- from "the shadows".

Liz, Makera, glad you liked those verses.

George, Ans. Dickheads?

Personally, I like the discipline of remaining strict to the 5,7,5 format.

Hoooot.

[George.Wright]

Hoot, Hoot...............correct, wise owl
Regards................Georges

[greta]

Greta~

Your Haiku are perfectly lovely! I wouldn't be concerned about 'counting syllables'. I don't believe the 'rules' are meant to be strict; they are only a guide....to brevity.

Love,

Makera

Thanks for your support.
I think that it would be interesting to discuss wheter one should follow the rules strictly or not.
Well, with haikus i think it's important to follow the rules. At least for those people (like me) who are not any good at rythm or metrics. With certain rules their creation is better.
One the other hand, rules are meant to be broken. If we didn't follow the rules, i think the outcome would be very interesting. but...is it a haiku then or is it something else?

[Makera]

Hi Greta~

Yes, you raise some interesting points. How strict should rules be in adapting a written art form from a totally unrelated language into English?
It's interesting to note also, that the Japanese process the sounds of their language in the opposite hemisphere of the brain to western language speakers. They process their language as we do sounds in nature, or music. Also, as Andrew mentioned in the introduction, the Japanese sound "syllables" are shorter than English; hence the debate re 12 vs 17.
So, there is some flexibility. I noticed Leonard Cohen's did not follow the 5-7-5 format either. Anyway, "the form does not make the poem" is what Andrew said. Sounds fine to me.

Love,

Makera

PS. Further note: LC's had only 15 syllables; 2 others only 10 & 16 respectively. It appears to be more flexible than my initial observation revealed.

[Susanne]

Spring ...

Evening in April -
small songbirds hidden in trees
still sing in their sleep.

***

Summer ...

A long way to go
but my travelling companions
are the wild roses.

***

I dive in the blue,
and a soft, silky morning
wraps me in sunlight.

***

Autumn ...

Small maple leaf boats
with shining, colourful sails,
floating on puddles.

***

St. Martin's lanterns -
so bright the Novembernight
when I was seven.

***

Winter ...

Snow-covered branches,
sleeping soundly and dreaming,
preparing for spring.

***

Love, Susanne

[lizzytysh]

Dear Susanne ~

Welcome to the Forum ! I see you have "2" posts, yet I'm not sure where the other one might be.

Thank you for the lovely and relaxing stroll through the seasons, with your colours signifying not only those which each bring, but the feelings, as well.

Along with their restful sound, I love them each for different reasons.....in the Spring, the songbirds "still sing in their sleep" [what a precious view of a songbird sleeping].....the wild roses in Summer make the road traveled worthwhile....being wrapped in sunlight is lush; the dive in the blue causes me to wonder if you skydive.....your Autumn haiku prompts me to encourage you to visit our "A Life of Errands" thread, in the Leonard Cohen poetry and novels section, and go to page 6, where you can read Helven's posting about Autumn. Your small maple leaf and puddles are very reminiscent.....as well as synchronistic .....because you're from Germany, I picture a 7-year-old girl with the November lanterns there [a lovely image]......I love your word "Novembernight"......Winter's description is so true, and brings us right back to Spring. An exquisite passing through......Haiku [and yours ~ both!]......so wonderful.

Love,
Lizzytysh

[Makera]

Welcome, Susanne~

Truly gorgeous! both visually and verbally. What a delight to see and read!

Love,

Makera

[greta]

wow susanne!
really good haikus. I especially liked the haikus about summer

[Susanne]

Dear Lizzytysh, Makera and Greta,

Your kind and warm words have touched me very much!
I'm so glad that you like my Haiku!
Thanks so much to you all!

Love, Susanne

[Susanne]

Dear Susanne ~
the dive in the blue causes me to wonder if you skydive
Love,
Lizzytysh

Dear Lizzytysh,

"I dive in the blue" was my first impression when I stepped out into the sunlight one morning in summer.
The wide blue sky above me gave me this overwhelming feeling.

Love, Susanne