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Yes, I think we've taken this one just about as far as it
should go!

Sorry for the teasing Mat.


Sherry

Meanwhile, back to jealous husbands, who are missing out on wive's sweet ditties from their [former !] lives... before all else had changed.


~ Lizzy

For V's day, I was reading ee cummings' poem "i like my body when it is with your body..." and then I came here and read your poem. You know, your first stanza has a lot of parallels with cummings' little ditty. In case you're unfamiliar, I'll stick it here for your perusal.

Nice work btw, love the twisted ending.



ee cummings

i like my body when it is with your
body. It is so quite a new thing.
Muscles better and nerves more.
i like your body. i like what it does,
i like its hows. i like to feel the spine
of your body and its bones, and the trembling
-firm-smooth ness and which i will
again and again and again
kiss, i like kissing this and that of you,
i like, slowly stroking the, shocking fuzz
of your electric fur, and what-is-it comes
over parting flesh . . . . And eyes big Love-crumbs,

and possibly i like the thrill

of under me you quite so new

Sherry,
I usually read more into poetry than I am meant to.
But that is where it and the "musk" in your poem lead me to.
I'll just blame it on your unconscious. A Freudian thing!

I prefer it the way I see it too, by the way.
So I'll leave it that way.

Matj

Hi Manna,

Thanks for posting the ee cummings poem. I had not seen it before.
I particularly like the line "Muscles better and nerves more." It's a very
compact poem. His use of the phrase "electric fur" gave me pause for
thought, but I guess he's just trying to add to the excitement of the moment.

Sherry

Hi Mat,

I usually read less into poetry than I am meant to. But I'm
working on that.

I'm glad Freud is not around to critique my poem!

Cheers,
Sherry

I'm glad Freud is not around to critique my poem!

Sherry

Maybe he is not.
But a few of his students are.

Mat said: "Maybe he is not.
But a few of his students are."


I wonder how feminists like Carol Gilligan would
interpret it?

Sherry