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Thanks Mat and James

I see now that I should stick with trust.

I know it is dangerous to trust but that is the whole point. To really be able to trust you need to find it and then you need to exercise it and experiment with it, and see if it can take a beating. Sounds like an art

A while back I felt that I needed to be able to trust myself that If I ever had to speak about a certain person in public that I would do so without reacting out of anger. So I found ways to test myself and eventually I became pretty satisfied. Even yourself you can only trust to the extent that you have something to base that trust on.

I like the feedback you are both giving me on this poem. I will tell you who I am addressing it to. I have a certain brain chemistry that led me to behave as a child the same way that children today behave and are labeled as having an attention deficit disorder. I don't really like the label and I think that the brain chemistry is just fine the way it is. I think there is a very good reason that children are the way they are and that it would be good if they came to appreciate the value of letting their brain work the way it works even though so many experts are trying to stop them. So it is to those children and the child in those who are now adults that I am trying to speak as one of the litter. Liking that the word litter also refers to how their way of thinking is often seen by others, as litter to be discarded.

I was born like this
I am one of the litter
That was born to love
Whatever would glitter

My niece cautioned me
all that glitters isn't gold
told her that's the consolation
for one like me growing old

I've heard that it is gold
that doesn't tarnish or rust
eventually you get to know
the glitter you can trust

JiminyC wrote:I like the new ending Jack, dawn is a beautiful moment to find new light and new possibility.

I'll save it for the end

Thanks for opening yourself up Jack and sharing that with us, I think I can appreciate where you are coming from. There was an English Artist named Ruskin who I've just been reading about and I would hazard a guess he had A.D.D and he contributed a great deal to life and art with his work and passion for the "glitter". What is not to notice in life?

I was born like this
I am one of the litter
That was born to follow
Whatever would glitter

My niece cautioned me
all that glitters isn't gold
I said that's a consolation
for one like me growing old

I've heard that it is gold
that doesn't tarnish or rust
eventually you get to know
the glitter you can trust

If they call you litter
or if they call you gold
it's the same in the end
to the market you're sold

So I trust the glitter
I alone can see
It is reflecting the light
That is meant for me

This is a complete poem that touches me. I love the way you came full circle with it, Jack.


~ Lizzy

lizzytysh wrote:This is a complete poem that touches me. I love the way you came full circle with it, Jack.
~ Lizzy

I had a lot of great help from all of you. Thanks

Teamwork that you were open to engaging in... I had no part in it but I love the end result.


~ Lizzy

The poem is working through you nicely, Jack.
Remember that poems are generally worked on for years, off and on.
The skeleton of your idea is strong. The meat around it is not lean enough yet.
The "intro", partly quoted below helps the reader. I like intro's.
I recognise the sense in your argument and I applaud your wisdom.

attention deficit disorder. I don't really like the label and I think that the brain chemistry is just fine the way it is.

Keep at it Jack.
Matj