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Dear Paula, your sex-driven verse reveals a poetic talent which hitherto you have shyly concealed. Well done!

Very good Paula!

I like C2s, use of the river of Cologne. These are the types of things I love to watch and dare not try.

Come now, C2, Paula rhymed June and Moon without making it tooo obvious. Give it a whirl! I'm sure you have another simmering in you.

Linda.

Linda, can't, won't, did already without using the words. are you never satisfied?

Of course I'm never satisfied! I need to watch the sweat dripping from your brow. Come on, you, write! Write. And then write some more!

I haven't seen you in a while. I hope you've had as much fun as I have.

Now, get to work!

Linda.

Laurie, thanks for the date but I must be honest. We are simply not compatible. I would rather die than rhyme moon and june. So, here is what we instead did on our date. It lasted 14 minutes and was challenging and fun. Isn't that good enough for you? I understand that you may never wish to see me again or that our future relationship may be only sexual. Kind regards, your unsuitorball, critic2.

Sorry, c2, it wasn't me, i waited for you to come and started without you.

Must have been one of my imaginary friends.

L

Linda I demand you forthwith place your offering on the thread.

And what offering would that be? Surely not one of a 'poetic' nature? I could offer my spaghetti sauce recipe.

Thank you.
Linda.

Paula~

Your poem is a hoot and a half!!

You should write more often.

Linda~ Quit whining. You have 26 letters. Use them!! Sit down, write something, submit it, and then let all of us taunt and humiliate your efforts. That is the WORSE that could happen and you know it won't.

Forget about the syllable thingy....just have fun....Watch, it is just like being naked in a room full of dressed people, when you submit poetry. Really, just as fun as that!!

L

That much fun, eh? Well, how's this. I'll think about it and if something just halfway poetic jumps out at me, I'll post it? That much I can promise.

Linda.

Linda~

Since this has a list so you can't just 'think' aboot it. You're gonna have to write the list (preferably on a piece of paper and not spaghetti sauce).

Just write the list vertically, keep the pen/pencil/sharp object in your hand and stare at the paper or out the window, etc. Think, think hard about a line that will end in JUNE,. Just one line at a time.

They start writing themselves once you get to this point.

JUST DO IT, Linda

thanks,
L

Laurie,

Are you aware that it is exactly this kind of interference with my poetic genius that can/could/might end very badly?

I am halfway, no three and three quarters of my way thru the first draft of a Monumental poem, now I must stop and answer this. Time for a break. I broke the last sharp object. I really feel as though, today, I am stupid enough to post something like this. Yes, I can rhyme June. With many words. Would you like to hear some? Or shall I just finish my Monumnet?

Thank you.
Linda.

"April may march upon this flaming june
with passionate joy disguising our stress
with shadows that dance by lines of the moon
with hunger that sates the ones who obsess
their time with the asp, with the wilting snake
that cannot conjure response that will moot
the emptiness of the poisonous cake,
that battenburg cake that mirrored the beaut",
he replied to the lady named Garbo
the heroine in scene 4 of the play
the scene which silenced the dashing hobo
who wouldn't see another breaking day.
His body floating south down the Rhine, stone -
faced with just a hint of dying cologne.

Pete

Oooh, perfect! I get to follow Pete! Time for a re-write.

Linda.

I am beginning to suspect that this whole thing is a ploy to keep me from posting on this site for the rest of my life.

Linda.

Pete-

A masterpiece!

The splitting of 'rhinestone' was brilliant. And the double-entendre of "dying cologne" very clever.

And you counted on your fingers with precision

Perfect.

thanks for sharing,
Laurie