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Anything I have said or done pales in comparison with the gifts you've so freely bestowed upon we who are truly privileged and blessed to call you friend, Friend. Thank *you* for all you are, share, and elegantly do.
<<Gulp!>>

I've got nothing else to say. I'm merely overwhelmed.
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Hi linda - Thanks for commenting on my words, but I have no idea what you're trying to say. That's ok, just thought you might want to know.
This seems like a bad time to try to explain it - let's just say long days - not enough sleep will make words difficult every time. For me at least. You did fine. How's that? A wee bit clearer? :)
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No worries Linda.
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Hi John

I enjoyed this song and felt it to be well constructed and fun. I am wondering about your use of "Wait that's too serious" -- is "Wait" a bit too strong. Would "No that's too serious" work better?

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Hi Chris - I'm always happy to read your feedback, you're quite an excellent writer!

As far as the "wait" goes, the reason I used that is that the music stops after that word and then picks up again later. Of course, you couldn't have known that just reading the words and not being able to hear them being sung.

Thanks!

John
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Hi John

Glad to be of help, John.

Thanks for explaining that the music stops after the word "wait" -- now that I know that, I agree that the word "wait" would work.

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