The Object of My Desire

Sherry · Post by **Sherry** » Thu Feb 15, 2007 9:21 pm

Yes, I think we've taken this one just about as far as it
should go!

Sorry for the teasing Mat.

Sherry

lizzytysh · Post by **lizzytysh** » Thu Feb 15, 2007 9:24 pm

Meanwhile, back to jealous husbands, who are missing out on wive's sweet ditties from their [former

!] lives... before all else had changed.

~ Lizzy

Manna · Post by **Manna** » Thu Feb 15, 2007 10:17 pm

For V's day, I was reading ee cummings' poem "i like my body when it is with your body..." and then I came here and read your poem. You know, your first stanza has a lot of parallels with cummings' little ditty. In case you're unfamiliar, I'll stick it here for your perusal.

Nice work btw, love the twisted ending.

ee cummings

i like my body when it is with your
body. It is so quite a new thing.
Muscles better and nerves more.
i like your body. i like what it does,
i like its hows. i like to feel the spine
of your body and its bones, and the trembling
-firm-smooth ness and which i will
again and again and again
kiss, i like kissing this and that of you,
i like, slowly stroking the, shocking fuzz
of your electric fur, and what-is-it comes
over parting flesh . . . . And eyes big Love-crumbs,

and possibly i like the thrill

of under me you quite so new

mat james · Post by **mat james** » Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:22 am

Sherry,
I usually read more into poetry than I am meant to.
But that is where it and the "musk" in your poem lead me to.
I'll just blame it on your unconscious. A Freudian thing!

I prefer it the way I see it too, by the way.
So I'll leave it that way.

Matj

Sherry · Post by **Sherry** » Sun Feb 18, 2007 3:48 pm

Hi Manna,

Thanks for posting the ee cummings poem. I had not seen it before.
I particularly like the line "Muscles better and nerves more." It's a very
compact poem. His use of the phrase "electric fur" gave me pause for
thought, but I guess he's just trying to add to the excitement of the moment.

Sherry

Sherry · Post by **Sherry** » Sun Feb 18, 2007 3:51 pm

Hi Mat,

I usually read less into poetry than I am meant to. But I'm
working on that.

I'm glad Freud is not around to critique my poem!

Cheers,
Sherry

mat james · Post by **mat james** » Sun Feb 18, 2007 4:09 pm

I'm glad Freud is not around to critique my poem!

Sherry

Maybe he is not.
But a few of his students are.

Sherry · Post by **Sherry** » Mon Feb 19, 2007 1:16 am

Mat said: "Maybe he is not.
But a few of his students are."

I wonder how feminists like Carol Gilligan would
interpret it?

Sherry