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Juan Juanders

6.15

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Agitated
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Cate
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Re: 6.15

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Hi Juan,

I liked this. I think you've nicely captured a sense of intimacy, dread of another tedious day at work and a desire to escape into that little room with your partner. My favourite line was 'tickling up my itchy nose' - not because its kind of sweet, more because of the image/story you give with that. why was her nose itchy? ohh she must have softly moving her face across his chest.
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