rusty old and beautiful

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Re: rusty old and beautiful

Post by Kuswadi » Sun Nov 01, 2009 6:54 am

Almost Eve


You wore only your scarf
like a gypsy
in the wilderness
almost-Eve
in the midday sun
you hung that shroud
around your naked form

and I heard you sing...

softly...

and Omar Khyaam whispered,
"a loaf of bread
a jug of wine
and thou beside me singing
in the wilderness-
this is paradise enough for me, now!"

Last night I battled with andamooka
silently screaming, beating its chest.
It stood there,
immovable,
indifferent
my life but a red speck
my heart but a red drop
in this vast barren desert
where love does not end.
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Re: rusty old and beautiful

Post by Cate » Wed Oct 05, 2011 9:41 pm

I'm going to put this here as in sense it belongs to one I posted here before.


Instructions on how to make ink from scratch

The fire has gone out.
All that’s left is ashes
burnt bits of paper, wood,
bone, grit. I scrape the soot
from the edges of the pit,
mix it with the honey you
left on my fingers and the whites
of an egg smashed on a rock.
I have no words left
but will paint every letter
that I can remember of you.



(edit note - removed s from fire(s) )
Last edited by Cate on Fri Oct 07, 2011 5:15 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: rusty old and beautiful

Post by imaginary friend » Thu Oct 06, 2011 3:02 am

Cate – your poem is unexpected and breathtaking. I've read it over and over.

This whole thread is lovely to re-read every once-in-a-while with its poetry and musings. Thanks for your poem, and for bringing this thread forward again.
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Re: rusty old and beautiful

Post by Violet » Thu Oct 06, 2011 6:44 am


.. I agree with I.F., Cate.. this is a compelling poem.

v. x
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Re: rusty old and beautiful

Post by Cate » Thu Oct 06, 2011 4:22 pm

thank you I.F. and V.
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Re: rusty old and beautiful

Post by mat james » Sat Oct 15, 2011 2:18 pm

Instructions on how to make ink from scratch
I suppose that is what writing poetry is. "...to make ink from scratch"...Wow.
I love the title.
Love the poem.

This poem takes me back to the beginning of this thread; Lizzy, Dianne, Boss and all the other wonderful characters rolling around in the back of that old truck/ute, somewhere in Wales.

What a great poem; short yet compounded with possibilities from the fascinating title to the to the last mysterious "you".
It certainly belongs on this thread....but....It really should have its own thread.
Keep writing; your poems just get better and better.

Mat.
"Without light or guide, save that which burned in my heart." San Juan de la Cruz.
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Re: rusty old and beautiful

Post by Cate » Sun Oct 16, 2011 2:51 pm

Thank you Mat - I do love this thread and the poems that you and others have posted here. The thread itself is like a story and think my poem is happier here then stuck on it's own.
I'm happy that you liked it.
mat james wrote:
Keep writing; your poems just get better and better.
Thank you Mat! That means a great deal to me.
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Re: rusty old and beautiful

Post by lizzytysh » Fri Oct 21, 2011 12:55 pm

And coming back in to this thread, what better place to land than in the back of Mat's old rusty and beautiful, with Cate sharing her poem that drives you right back to its beginning as soon as you've reached the end. It overflows with images and meaning. Such a creative approach for your messages.

Thanks, Mat, for including me there. Hi to you and hope you, your opals and dear ones are going well.

Your poem couldn't be happier than it is here, Cate.
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Re: rusty old and beautiful

Post by katrin » Wed Oct 26, 2011 8:42 am

Thank you Cate for this great poem and
thank you for putting it on this thread, this thread meant a lot to me.

I have not been back on the forum since over a year, it is nice to be right back where I left.

Thank you Mat and all the others for the ride, I loved it.

:)
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Re: rusty old and beautiful

Post by mat james » Fri Dec 16, 2011 4:05 pm

Slow and Sure

I bought another old truck
75 Land Rover 4WD
I am re-painting it
Enamel and brush
Nothing fancy
I’m going over the old colors
Like for like
I don’t want it to look new
But I want it to look loved
And it is.

I bought it from Berny
My friend and mining buddy;
He was going to sell it to
Someone else
37 years of history gone,
Almost.

New shockers
Rejuvenated radiator
Old voyages distilled
New adventures ahead

I love old things
They place me in the middle
I can look back
And look forward

A sense of belonging
Settles sweetly into my being
I am the resurrection
And the Life

Slow and sure
I saunter on.


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Re: rusty old and beautiful

Post by imaginary friend » Sat Dec 17, 2011 1:36 am

Your poem made my day, Mat; (or maybe resurrected it...)

Hope you'l take us along on some of your adventures in the 'Rover 8)

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"Slow and Sure"

Post by Steven » Sat Dec 17, 2011 2:26 am

Hi Mat,

To appropriate (appropriately so) your words about a world-class poet in another section of this forum,
you are "a real craftsman." And to add my own: and a real artist. "Slow and Sure" is terrific. Objects
and well written poems can help to put us in time and place.
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Re: rusty old and beautiful

Post by lizzytysh » Sat Dec 17, 2011 5:19 am

I love it, too, Mat. I love how you so smoothly worked you way through this poem, the details, the overview, the perspective and philosophy. The moment.
Not as old, but I have a new but old truck which saved the day, just tonight. Switched vehicles at my repair shop.
P;ease tell Berny I said Hi. I'm so glad he'll still be able to have more good times in his old, faithful truck, thanks to you.
I was happy to see Katrin stop by when she did, even though I didn't comment at the time.


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Re: rusty old and beautiful

Post by B4real » Sat Dec 17, 2011 6:14 am

As most of you know I’m a visual artist and I don't usually write poetry. This is the second one (if you can call it a poem) that I've attempted.
But I have just noticed this wonderful thread and it has inspired me to contribute the following. I did it in probably fifteen minutes. I hope it’s OK.

Moving On
or (Further Down The Road)

I loved him completely, unconditionally
he was like no other I ever had
it just felt so right
that he came into my life

I first saw him one damp day
from the bus window
caught my eye – so handsome
so different from the rest
stood out from the crowd

my heart skipped a beat
I knew I had to have him

We were so happy
went everywhere together
he took me places
I could never have gone by myself

but in every relationship I ever had
there comes a time to say goodbye
I just had to realise
he was too old for me

I needed a much younger one
The signs were there for all to see

The cracks were starting to appear
I knew I had to leave him
It’s so hard to break off such a bond
when you’ve been through so much
together for so long a time

I’ll never forget the forlorn look
on his face when I drove past him
for the last time in a brand new shiny car
his regrettable replacement!

This is a true story (another layer within) and I still grieve for my “Brumby” (Subaru Ute 1992). I live by the sea and he was getting so old, rusty (but still beautiful) and temperamental from the salt air that I reluctantly traded him in for a newer car (regrettably not a ute).

Here he is in his glory days when our love was fresh and new:
Bev's-Subaru-Brumby-4WD-Ute.jpg

Bev's-Subaru-Brumby-4WD-Ute.jpg
There are still a few Brumby Utes left on the roads here in Australia; unfortunately they ceased production in 1992. When I’m out driving and I see one my head turns to see if it is my ‘lost love’. I don’t want another one – I want him!

…….and here’s a bit of serendipitous karma for you. His number plate is original as I bought it. The first and second letters are my initials and I decided at the time the third one was for ‘good’ which it was during the course of our time together!

Bev

EDIT: I've just re-read my 'poem' and one of my lines reads suspiciously like a line from Anthem :shock: I could change it but that is how it came to me when I first wrote it so I will let my subconscious mind have its way!
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Re: rusty old and beautiful

Post by Cate » Sat Dec 17, 2011 3:28 pm

I've just re-read my 'poem' and one of my lines reads suspiciously like a line from Anthem :shock: I could change it but that is how it came to me when I first wrote it so I will let my subconscious mind have its way!
Perhaps your subconscious wanted to pay homage.

I enjoyed your poem Bev. I was a bit shocked when I got to the line "I just had to realise/ he was too old for me" - no offense but I thought that was a pretty horrible way to treat someone who had treated you well and then of course I realized it was a car. :razz: I love twists like that in a poem.
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