Cannot stand pretending

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peter danielsen
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Cannot stand pretending

Post by peter danielsen » Tue Oct 25, 2005 10:28 pm

I cannot stand pretending
- what mean and crazy
thought -
my heart is offered
daily
alone the mind
is bought
So utterly
affected
I'm crazy, torn
and free
this heart goes on
pretending
the song was made
for thee

I cannot stand defending
the mean and crazy
thought:
the modern love of reason
the need of space,
the court

I cannot stand suspending
The revelated
Court
his mercy offered
daily:
that law gives love
a thought

I cannot help attending
The song I never
Caught
I cannot help pretending
A brain behind
The thought
So utterly
affected
I'm crazy, torn
and free
this heart goes on
pretending
the song was made
for thee
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Post by lizzytysh » Tue Oct 25, 2005 10:49 pm

Is this by any chance set to music, as well, Peter?

~ Lizzy
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Post by Fljotsdale » Tue Oct 25, 2005 11:17 pm

It certainly should be set to music! You are right, Lizzy. It has the cadences and feel of song, doesn't it?
Only just found this video of LC:
http://ca.youtube.com/user/leonardcohen?ob=4" target="_blank

This one does make me cry.
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Post by lizzytysh » Tue Oct 25, 2005 11:19 pm

Yes, Fljots, it does :) .
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Post by peter danielsen » Wed Oct 26, 2005 12:02 pm

Actually I am working hard on a tune for this lyric, but its not there yet. In the meantime I like to sing it to the melody of "Seems so Long ago Nancy". Leonards melody is so beautiful, it always brings tears to my eyes.

Peter
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Post by lizzytysh » Wed Oct 26, 2005 12:23 pm

I just tried it...it seems to work 8) . Even tugs on the heart a little more.
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Post by Makera » Fri Dec 09, 2005 9:56 pm

Hi Peter :)

Yeah, not bad, considering the inspiration was my poem: Coeur Cassé.

A few of yours have started as comments on mine, haven't they :wink:

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~ Makera
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Post by peter danielsen » Fri Dec 09, 2005 10:55 pm

Hi genelle,
I guess my text started as a comment on your words, and then ended as an answer


you :"Pretend you're not affected
that it doesn't mean a thing
when a heart offered freely
cracks in the cold again"

me "I cannot stand pretending
- what mean and crazy
thought -
my heart is offered
daily
alone the mind
is bought
So utterly
affected
I'm crazy, torn
and free
this heart goes on
pretending
the song was made
for thee

I cannot stand defending
the mean and crazy
thought:
the modern love of reason
the need of space,
the court

I cannot stand suspending
The revelated
Court
his mercy offered
daily:
that law gives love
a thought

I cannot help attending
The song I never
Caught"



you: "I'll pretend I'm not affected
that it doesn't mean a thing
for the heart I offered freely
to be frozen out again"

Me"I cannot help pretending
A brain behind
The thought
So utterly
affected
I'm crazy, torn
and free
this heart goes on
pretending
the song was made
for thee"

Peter
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Post by Makera » Fri Dec 09, 2005 11:18 pm

Thanks Peter, it was a good answer :D

The irony is that it didn't come from the actual subject of the poem -- totally ignored, still :?

~ Makera
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