Both sides of dat time together, poem I wrote 4 years ago

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Both sides of dat time together, poem I wrote 4 years ago

Post by mickey_one » Mon May 06, 2013 9:36 am

ALICE AND ROSIE


Rosie loved me for a whole summer-
we had borrowed someone else's cottage
by someone else's lake

each day we sat silently
at the edge of our relationship

when we looked down,
innocent water seemed to say
that we were perpetual

when we looked up
a blameless horizon told us
there was no limit to our love

but Nature doesn't always know best
and our love ended with the summer



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Alice, a lake is just a lake
it's water not magic,
and the sky is there for everyone
Monday lovers and Friday friends alike

I shared all with you that week
except your plans for our future
and now I must softly share
that only you
will ever write poems about that summer
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Re: Both sides of dat time together, poem I wrote 4 years ag

Post by Cate » Mon May 06, 2013 9:37 pm

I remember this one Michael! (how are you?)
I love the call response of these two as they remember a nice moment shared before continuing their own paths.

Whether a sky is blameless and endless, or if the sky is just light refracting from tiny bits of air, it is still appears blue on a sunny day.
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Post by mickey_one » Mon May 06, 2013 10:13 pm

Cate wrote:I remember this one Michael! (how are you?)
I love the call response of these two as they remember a nice moment shared before continuing their own paths.

Whether a sky is blameless and endless, or if the sky is just light refracting from tiny bits of air, it is still appears blue on a sunny day.
Hi, Im fine thanks. seems like ages since we spoke. Hope you had a nice day. here it was a Public Holiday. I expect you have had a day of relentless work without any fun break at all.
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Post by Cate » Mon May 06, 2013 11:28 pm

mickey_one wrote:here it was a Public Holiday
oh sure, rub it in.

It was really nice here today so I found myself pleasantly distracted from work but still got a fair amount done.
Our long weekend will be in a couple of weeks in honour of Leonard Cohens song “Queen Victoria” it’s not such a great holiday though. We basically just drink beer while wearing uncomfortable corsets and set off fireworks. (luckily trips to the emergency room are free)
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Re: Both sides of dat time together, poem I wrote 4 years ag

Post by mat james » Wed Jun 05, 2013 2:52 pm

each day we sat silently
at the edge of our relationship
For me, these two lines above, juxtaposed against that ever-present "lake" make wonderful poetry, Mickey.
(particularly for a belly-button-gazer like me)

MatbbgJ
"Without light or guide, save that which burned in my heart." San Juan de la Cruz.
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Post by lizzytysh » Wed Jun 05, 2013 4:07 pm

Have had those moments that Mat selected. So intricately, yet diffusely, described.
Great points, Cate. And would love to see the corset drinking lol.

Love the two poems and their connection.
Love this side of you, Michael... which I too rarely see.
"Be yourself. Everyone else is already taken."
~ Oscar Wilde
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Post by fishfishquaileye » Thu Jun 06, 2013 12:31 am

lizzytysh wrote:Have had those moments that Mat selected. So intricately, yet diffusely, described.
Great points, Cate. And would love to see the corset drinking lol.

Love the two poems and their connection.
Love this side of you, Michael... which I too rarely see.

Michael is full of shit, just like his lake
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Re: Both sides of dat time together, poem I wrote 4 years ag

Post by lizzytysh » Thu Jun 06, 2013 6:14 am

Well, I'm not disagreeing with you there, fishfish.
And at least you can clean the lake.
"Be yourself. Everyone else is already taken."
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