UNTITLED (Another poem about one aspect of womanhood)
UNTITLED (Another poem about one aspect of womanhood)
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Weybridge MBW 11th July 2009
'All I know - and you must listen very carefully to this... All I know - is that I know absolutely nothing' - Frank
'Who ever loved that loved not at first sight?' - Christopher Marlowe
Much misunderstood... was the 'Hippie' with a reality fixation...
'All I know - and you must listen very carefully to this... All I know - is that I know absolutely nothing' - Frank
'Who ever loved that loved not at first sight?' - Christopher Marlowe
Much misunderstood... was the 'Hippie' with a reality fixation...
Re: UNTITLED (Another poem about one aspect of womanhood)
This is nice. How about a title along the lines of . . . "As yet, Untitled?"
Re: UNTITLED (Another poem about one aspect of womanhood)
Hi Alsiony, I enjoyed your poem.
it's a wonderful subject.
it's a wonderful subject.
'bellies full of clay' I really like that, such limitless possibilities.And all of us women -
Who are with bellies full of clay
Re: UNTITLED (Another poem about one aspect of womanhood)
Thanks for your comments guys -
Gina I am just hopeless at creating titles! Though I like your suggestion.
I am sure it comes from an underlying (and totally unrealistic) desire to not always want to give things titles or labels - not just with poems and stories, but anything really. I know that probably sounds stupid - but even my own name sometimes, instead of someone calling 'Claire' I would be quite happy with 'Hey' or 'Ugg'
Thanks also Cate
While I think that we are all born with some basic identity and traits, ofcourse it's mainly all about what happens to the individual that decides what happens not only for them, but within the 'group' overall.
Clay is such a nice sounding word anyways, and a natural substance too, which fitted in with the correspondences I was making overall.
I wanted to get across the idea of possibilities and potential and opportunity. What wonderful and important things they are too.
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Gina I am just hopeless at creating titles! Though I like your suggestion.
I am sure it comes from an underlying (and totally unrealistic) desire to not always want to give things titles or labels - not just with poems and stories, but anything really. I know that probably sounds stupid - but even my own name sometimes, instead of someone calling 'Claire' I would be quite happy with 'Hey' or 'Ugg'
Thanks also Cate
While I think that we are all born with some basic identity and traits, ofcourse it's mainly all about what happens to the individual that decides what happens not only for them, but within the 'group' overall.
Clay is such a nice sounding word anyways, and a natural substance too, which fitted in with the correspondences I was making overall.
I wanted to get across the idea of possibilities and potential and opportunity. What wonderful and important things they are too.
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x
Weybridge MBW 11th July 2009
'All I know - and you must listen very carefully to this... All I know - is that I know absolutely nothing' - Frank
'Who ever loved that loved not at first sight?' - Christopher Marlowe
Much misunderstood... was the 'Hippie' with a reality fixation...
'All I know - and you must listen very carefully to this... All I know - is that I know absolutely nothing' - Frank
'Who ever loved that loved not at first sight?' - Christopher Marlowe
Much misunderstood... was the 'Hippie' with a reality fixation...
Re: UNTITLED (Another poem about one aspect of womanhood)
Alsiony, I love this. 'bellies full of clay" is superb!
Juan
Juan
Re: UNTITLED (Another poem about one aspect of womanhood)
Thankyou Juan.
I love reading your posts in this section, I deliberately look out for you
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Weybridge MBW 11th July 2009
'All I know - and you must listen very carefully to this... All I know - is that I know absolutely nothing' - Frank
'Who ever loved that loved not at first sight?' - Christopher Marlowe
Much misunderstood... was the 'Hippie' with a reality fixation...
'All I know - and you must listen very carefully to this... All I know - is that I know absolutely nothing' - Frank
'Who ever loved that loved not at first sight?' - Christopher Marlowe
Much misunderstood... was the 'Hippie' with a reality fixation...