Well, I did discover the other night there is something viscerally anachronistic about getting your hands on a lump of cool, wet clay and shaping it on a wheel; like it was the stuff of museums and archeological digs and my ancestors, whoever they may be, yet present at the same time. But alas, none...

I took my first pottery throwing class last night and it reminded me of this olde thing... Verse-A-Tile Co. ( We Aim To Please !) Hope squared the flattened red clay, grabbed another mud ball and repeated the act, using the sturdy, round stick to smash down and mold the pliant doughy earth. Grabbing...

georges~ This, more than most, reads like you just kept writing until you stumbled upon a word that rhymed with the line above. The highly uneven line lengths, for one thing make your 'rhyme scheme' inconsequential. If you paid a little attention to line lengths, not visually, but through counting s...

Aaaah. That explains the "60s vibe."

Very creative (on your part) and looks like it must have been fun.

cheers,
Laurie

Cate~ Interesting images. It has a 60's vibe about it. How are you using the term "found poem"? The one experience I've had with that term took something verbatim from a written source (newpaper, magazine, etc) where you extract a portion that can stand alone, as is. I can't see this being...

manna wrote: The idea that you throw something down and it's a finished, high-quality poem (or painting or sculpture...) seems insulting to the artist to me. When scanning through the comments this morning the first word that came to me is: Retarded. "Insulting" is very good, too. 8) fork ...

Which stealing of the phrase "I don't know much about art, but I know what I like" is meant to convey that I think poetry is art, so the more spontaneous the better. The more craft involved the less art, thus less of the individual creating the poetry is involved, and soon you have cookie...

If there was no 'craft' to be applied, there would be no need to have Poetry classes in universities and such... "Write down the first thing you think and feel and call it poem" would be the beginning and end of that tutorial. Besides, that is the definition of a diary entry. cheers, Laurie

I'm not a fan of editing what first comes out...,

Poetry is a craft, not a matter of spontaneous combustion

typical, I knew you would completely deny it.

Thanks for the chuckle.

Sigh. What is imagery or interesting detail? Let me go simply from memory of reading the original version much earlier today: white-tailed deer their black eyes foliage purple tunic brown skin a troubled marriage a lazy-eye being alone on a trail with a stranger the delight of tension broke with a g...

Yeah, Mikey, I was a most corrupt judge. I'm still living off the prize money in Hawaii and sipping on an umbrella decorated beverage as we speak. Yum



Aloha!

M~

Your revision of this piece doesn't do it any favors.
Sorry.
One example is where you state the lunge is fake...when the smile shows us that without 'telling.'

L

Thanks Cate!
I enjoy little ones (total of 2) on me and big ones on others
Glad you liked it.

cheers,
Laurie

Hi Manna~ Enjoyable read. I'm still not completely comfortable with Prose poems even though my last English course had a chapter on them...such a fine line... But, I do believe you have to be uber diligent on making your language tight as possible. Although, the story here is told well (and is quite...