There is enough material here for 100 poems, develop and expand a few lines instead of this ubiquitous mood tirade, although good - for the way people spit responses.

Ben Kelly

I've always enjoyed the depth of Joe's work, never ever observed his ego in his poetry?

Ben Kelly

george


pure perfect poetry


ben

george


The story line is clearer with less imagery.

I like this style better than the usual mind games assault course

Cheers

Ben

George Hairy Tick has just sent some material to add to your new poem. He said make some curtains and close them in front of the screen, as you are letting in too much light in the world. George the Vampire version of Ben. My best vampire joke would cause too much trouble here so I'll save it for a ...

Dear George I have been banished by the reactionaries for being a too much of a radical. and now only make comments on your poetry for my wicked behaviour. So on with the show this is it. Dance with space Be sure you can see the face Dance the time Give the reader a chance to see the rhyme Dance a ...

dear george

The Sunday Post and Oor Willie, only man
You Wee Free Pentacostalist
Shame on you Mr Wright
Easter and the Whitsundayist

Ben, Minister Mintist

Dear George

Since the tone of the poem is melancholy I think the constant rhymes are not necessary here to improve the meaning. Here I would lose the Rhymes and hence confusion?

The poetry warrior is gradually hanging up his battle axe, and finally retires?


Cheers


Ben

Dear George I have been banished by the reactionaries for being a too much of a radical. and now only make comments on your poetry for my wicked behaviour. So on with the show this is it. Dance with space Be sure you can see the face Dance the time Give the reader a chance to see the rhyme Dance a r...

Dear George

There were no attachments received for the two poems today?


Ben

Dear LaurieAK A poem for brittle, little, fragile people All gone is the guile and the teethy smile Walking slowly alone, thin as stick people Living lives very sick in thick medical files Doctor please no more tablets and neddles Move along there, you walking stick people This is the queue to St Pe...

George The adjectives and adverbs have undone you Keep to the nouns and verbs like action men do There more lava flowing from you, yes or no Than from the tropical island smoking volcano The Boundary is only limited by imagination Please another vision, a present day version You must know the guy wh...

George

Eve in Eden
Man in Eden
Man in woman
Eden

The cradle is now full

My worst comment but couldn't resist it.

Knee trembling
Cheers

Ben

Dear Tom

Are you trying to spoil my fun with George? We never let the truth interfere with a good story or bad poetry. Men in Eden the tutorial years, man hasn't changed much in the 100,000 years.

Thanks for your instruction, but accuracy is not what I'm striving for.

Cheers

Ben

Dear Tom

Are you trying to spoil my fun with George? We never let the truth interfere with a good story or bad poetry. Men in Eden the tutorial years, man hasn't changed much in the 100,000 years.

Thanks for your instruction, but accuracy is not what I'm striving for.

Cheers

Ben