:sigh: Alice... :roll: You are a writer; you should be conscious of the subtleties of the language you use and the impressions likely to be created. When you post a message that starts with: "for real writing, check out Tom Waits "Red Shoes" ..." It is obvious that you are sayin...

Thank you for your gentle comments, Mat, Lizzy and Pinata Heart. Mat, your spirited little boy with his beaten legs was in my thoughts when writing this. Yes Lizzy, the characters are a small girl and her father. In the long run, her father's selfish actions may have done her a favour; toughened he...

Hello Alice, Congrats. On which day will it be a poem? Will there be a poemitzvah to mark the occasion or perhaps you'll just take it out for ice cream sundaes to celebrate? (I wouldn't take it out for a beer if I were you, drunken poems are nothing but trouble.) It will be a poem on the day your h...

It’s a nursery life
And I scream for what I want
And I want it now or sooner
And its wrong for me to share
It’s a nursery life


Alice

"I am not a number"

Sideways wrote: >my love, I am here >for only five more minutes >so shaft me quickly so shaft me quickly in Llanfairpwllgwyngyllgogerychwyrndrobwllllantysiliogogogoch while singing 'Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious' Dear Geoffrey, Haiku's are a particular form demanding specific numbers of syllab...

anneporter wrote:paradox unfurled:
dense fog on dirty white snow
air warm as blankets

air warm as blankets
hair worn in a bee hive style
lacquered and so stiff

Dear 1 2 3 4 5 6, you can't count, kindly bugger off. Love, Cate - - - - - the last line remains des·ti·na·tion: far Cate, you are showing ignorance, stubborn wilfulness, or poor pronunciation skills des-ti-na-ti-on far = 6 syllables. The word "destination" is not pronounced by any educat...

lizzytysh wrote:[Alice... do you pronounce poems as po-ems?]

yes, of course

Alice

"I am not a number"

"destination: far"

1 2 3 4 5 6

Poems don’t make much cash


1 2 3 4 5 6

Sideways wrote:Dear Myra, my reference to ironing was what is technically called an "analogy". I was actually bemoaning your poem-lite writing. Is this really what we fought for- Tweedom of Expression?

Sue

Rude and unnecessary.


Alice

"I am not a number"

Alice, this is a well improved revision. I particularly like the end line of your part, "and our love ended with the summer". A season to everything? Do you mind me asking how old you were/are. And Rosie too. I look forward to you writing your further part in reply to Rosie's straight sho...

lizzytysh wrote:leave safety behind
along with the rabbit hole
Alice is waiting

Alice is waiting
tables periodically
poems don't make cash


Alice

"I am not a number"

Rosie loved me for a whole summer- we had borrowed someone else's cottage by someone else's lake each day we sat silently at the edge of our relationship when we looked down, innocent water seemed to say that we were perpetual when we looked up a blameless horizon told us there was no limit to our l...

Hello again. Here is a revised version, mainly to mine, a tiny change to "Rosie's". Rosie loved me for a whole summer we had borrowed someone else's cottage by someone else's lake each day we sat silently at the edge of our relationship when we looked down, innocent water seemed to say tha...